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You clearly know what you're doing when it comes to using your camera and directing your model which is great.
I love how simple this image is, just her the rocks and the sea Her pose is great too, she looks relaxed playing with her hair and feeling the cool breeze on her neck.
The crop works well but I feel like a rectangular crop would have worked better?
The subtle tones work very well and the soft focus on everything but your model really draw your eye in.
I also like the textures of the water, the rocks and then the models skin and clothing adding something soft to the images.
One thing I must say is that you've gone to all the effort to edit this and shoot it and it's worked well but it reminds me a bit like iPhone instagram photos, just my personal taste puts me off a little bit, but it doesn't detract from the beauty of the image and the tones make me think of a lovely summer morning.
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etainn Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013
:-)
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I-am-Antonella Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012
Gorgeous. :D
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head-in-the-cloud Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012   Photographer
Hi :aww:
You have been featured in my newest For evermore. August ' 12 part 3 :giggle:
Please check it out and fave it if you enjoyed it. ^^;
Have a nice day! :la:

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keidream Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012
How beautiful! The monochromatic background and blurring around the edges give me the feeling that her world is just revolving around her. She looks so serene. Yet despite this, for whatever reason, the photograph does not come across as hopeful. Another commenter mentioned that the blurring of the ground made it seem as though she were about to fall... maybe that's it. Anyway, you've done a wonderful job of creating a moment seemingly suspended in time.
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Anthrokid Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012
I love the expression on her face. She's relaxed and pleased with her mind, and surroundings. This is revealed by her expression and body posture. I loved how with this picture is somewhat faded on the rocks and partially amongst the waves. This is an astounding photo in my opinion. :dance:
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DsyncStudios Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2012   Photographer
:wave: Hi there! Your wonderful picture has been featured!
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Desynka Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2012  Student Photographer
nice to look :)
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Yamin879 Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2012
the blur on the sand she's sitting on makes me scared like she's going to fall
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Buntcone Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
:omfg: who stole your trousers!?!?!? ;P
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foster1984 Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Good subject and setting, overall a good photo. my only sugestion would be to make the model sharper
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J-Styles75 Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012
love the blur effect. it makes you focus on the subject which is the beautiful model. :)
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owlehh Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You have no idea how fitting this picture goes with the song I'm listening to! xD
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EbolaBears Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012
Besides the blurry rocks on the bottom left, I think it's all good.


I mean, some sharks in the water and aliens coming from space would add drama, but I'm not sure you have access to sharks or know any aliens:P
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Ronja-S Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
I like the colours and the idea. But in the left down corner (I hope you know what I mean) there is too much movement with the blur effect. Because it's just the rock and normally rocks don't move so I think less blur would be better there :) Anyway the model is beautiful!
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PawelMatys Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you for commenting! :hug: Next time I will avoid the blur effect ;)
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FallenDesigns Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
*dies* SO MUCH MOVEMENT :wow:
I'm no photographer (though I wish to be good at it someday) so I dunno exactly how to give you any like... good critique.
The blurriness thing, it makes it look like the WHOLE picture is moving and she is sat there enjoying herself on the beach (if that is where she is sitting?) like.. the sand and water is moving away from her or something.. but I do kinda agree with them other comments about it making you rather dizzy. But I mean, if your point was to get it to look like she was doing things in her own time sorta thing, then I think you got that well done :D
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PawelMatys Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you for this! I really appreciate your words! :) I've reduced "the blurriness thing", is it better now? :D I'm a newbie in the portrait photography so I just want to know what other people think ;)
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FallenDesigns Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
    Now this, is truly an awesome shot. It looks SO much better now that you've reduced it, very lovely :D And of course, I will always give any tips and help whenever I can to anyone who asks for it, because I know how much it means :aww: :D
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FallenDesigns Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
    Oh! A fellow Swede? :aww:
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PawelMatys Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Jag såg inte att du var svensk! ;) Jag kommer faktiskt från Polen men bor i Stockholm sedan 4 år tillbaka :)
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FallenDesigns Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Inte jag heller, tills jag checka din sida :) Jag bodde i England för typ fem eller sex år sen men sen dess har jag bott i Sverige, norr om Stockholm ;)
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Sarah-BK Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Makes me a little dizzy staring at it, but great photo :)
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PawelMatys Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you! :) I shouldn't make the blur effect that strong...
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Sarah-BK Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Maybe yeah :)
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JJJorgie Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is a really pretty picture! I'm not a photographer, so I don't know a ton about the techniques and technical terms, but there is onw thing a notice. The bluriness of the sand and water kind of hurt/strain (I don't know the right work for this) my eyes, especially because the girl is the same color as the blurred spots. I know it's supposed to make the girl stand out (and it does), but you may want to lessen the blur.

I do hope this helps! Keep up the good work!
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PawelMatys Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you so much for your comment! :heart: I wanted to try something different but if you say that it's too much of the blur and it's hurting your eyes then I should change it! :)
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JJJorgie Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem at all! The blur's a good idea! Just be sure there's a variation of color between your focal point and background! :)
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